Bad Seed Chapters 1-5

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Bad Seed Chapters 1-5

Postby ashbow » Tue Jul 12, 2011 5:35 pm

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Re: Bad Seed Chapters 1-5

Postby shireling » Wed Jul 13, 2011 1:23 am

Nice going, ash! I'm enjoying it very much :yes:!

One thing I would suggest is putting a space between paragraphs. It just makes it easier for old buzzards like me to read :).
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Re: Bad Seed Chapters 1-5

Postby ashbow » Wed Jul 20, 2011 5:57 pm

Thanks Shireling...I just copied and pasted from Office Notes, and didn't realize it scrunched up the spaces.

I'll post more chapters if I get a few people to read this first section.


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